Comments by Emily Raymond

Comment for "Fish No Longer Local"

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Review of Fish No Longer Local

As a native (and very nostalgic) Seattleite, I was interested to hear what was going on up in my hometown, and this short but interesting piece did not disappoint.
I was surprised to hear that Puget Sound, which seems such a bountiful place, supplied almost none of the region's seafood, and interviews with a fish thrower and a local chef elegantly illustrated the globalization of seafood and provided an interesting spin on the conflict between protecting the environment and local industry. The producer's use of sound is excellent, and at its close, the listener is left with a thought-provoking answer to the question "Where does my food come from?"
The piece would fit very well in a magazine-style show about food or environmental health.

Comment for "Students' Rights: Then and Now"

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Review of Students' Rights: Then and Now

This story starts out with a great old sound clip, and a necessary (but clear and entertaining) explanation of historical background.
This leads on to an interesting discussion of this case's implications in light of the war in Iraq. The issues in the piece, which could be complicated and confusing if presented in the wrong way, are presented so that they're easy to understand and listen to.
"Students' Rights: Then and Now" would be an excellent addition to any show dealing with a youth perspective on the war in Iraq, or a show about the First Amendment, either today or throughout history.

Comment for "Katrina Photojournalist John McCusker"

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Review of Katrina Photojournalist John McCusker

This piece is, for lack of a better term, SO COOL.
The producers set of a great sense of place in the beginning, which continues throughout the piece with the sounds of crunching food and motorcycles revving outside the restaurant.
At first, the interview takes a more general tone, with McCusker talking about the things he saw and did (listen for the explanation of "ant balls"). But throughout the piece, McCusker's story gets more specific, first focusing on the specific problems that journalists dealt with and finishing with his own family's reaction to Katrina and the indefinite future they face. The piece has a moving finale, which serves as the portrait of an ordinary man caught up in one of the biggest natural disasters our country has known.
This piece is long enough to stand on its own, and would serve as a much-needed reminder that the effects of Katrina are still being felt all across the South.

Comment for "I'll Quit Cutting When You Quit Smoking"

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Review of I'll Quit Cutting When You Quit Smoking

This piece offers a little different perspective on the teen phenomenon known to most as "cutting": the narrator happened upon it by accident while washing the dishes, instead of making a decision to try it like most. In fact, it's this kind of unconventional energy that permeates the piece. Segments and thoughts are purposely disjointed, giving the listener the impression of a stream-of-consciousness or a diary being flipped through. Adding to the disjointed feeling is the juxtaposition of the diary entries; the narrator insists that "cutting works" while her life crashes down around her.
The piece does a great job of describing an atmosphere in which one would choose to cut, and exploring how that atmosphere would affect a cutter as time goes on. The only thing missing is a slightly deeper explanation of the feelings that cutting itself brings on - why does the act make you feel better? Even without the answer, this piece would still be an excellent addition to any show on teen health or teen social issues, as the emergence of cutting is now too big to safely ignore.

Comment for "The Kids Who Got Out - My Graduation Day"

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Review of The Kids Who Got Out - My Graduation Day

Many of us would tend to write off the alternative-school kids, and a whole host of stereotypes came immediately to my mind when I read about this piece. However, I was soon proven wrong - although the piece takes place in the context of one single graduation day, we can see, through interviews with teachers and sound clips, how the narrator has changed for the better throughout her schooling.
There are several aspects of the piece that interested me, such as the narrator's reasons for wanting a diploma, but the best thing about it was that I could recognize my own graduation, and others I've attended, listening to the story. The narrator proves that her graduation, although the students were different, carries the same sense of pride and accomplishment as any other.

Comment for "The Inner Workings of a High School Marching Band"

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Review of The Inner Workings of a High School Marching Band

This piece is based around an interesting structure - instead of trying to explain a massive, complicated entity like a marching band in the context of a story arc, the piece's producer gets out or our way and lets various people involved in the band tell the listener what goes on instead.
The problem with this, however, is that a lot of the knowledge is just dropped on the listener out of the blue: terms like "guard" and "drum major" are used quite frequently, and if you're not familiar with marching bands, it may be confusing for you, and require some close listening and guessing to follow the story.
But the point of the piece manages to shine through anyway: contrary to what "American Pie" would have us believe, band camp is about hard work and dedication, and at the end of the piece, I came away with a new appreciation for the discipline needed on every member's part.

Comment for "Friday Night At Epiphany's"

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Review of Friday Night At Epiphany's

Radio pieces about music you LIKE are a dime a dozen. Radio pieces about music towards which you're a little squeamish, however, are truly unique - and "Friday Night At Epiphany's" unique angle is one of the many things that make this story worth a listen.
Protagonist Claudia's initial feelings toward metal, punk, and hardcore would be easy for most listeners to identify with: her first experience on MySpace turns out to be more than a little unappetizing. However, the piece has a nicely timed story arc: Claudia goes to a local show and, after talking to the musicians and bystanders, eventually finds herself appreciating and even enjoying these new genres. The story could easily be told in a preachy or cliched way, but it avoids that pitfall well: Claudia's words sound like her own, and many listeners will likely find common ground and shared experiences.
This piece is long enough to stand comfortably on its own, but it would also fit well within a show about teen activities or any of the musical genres involved.

Comment for "Hopeless in High School"

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Review of Hopeless in High School

Most of us have a very vivid mental picture of a high school dropout: an unemployed slacker, sitting on their parents' sofa, maybe a bag or two of Cheezits laying around. But the narrator of this piece debunks that stereotype with a well-spoken, well-reasoned explanation for her high school troubles.
The narrator sets the scene very well, and contradicts the dropout stereotype by not only thinking through her decision, but asking her counselor and parents as well (both seem to think she's responsible enough). However, she then dropped the bombshell on the listener that, two years later, she was still in school, without any explanation of what changed, why, or when. With a little more explanation, this piece would be an excellent counterpoint to lighter stories about high school life.

Comment for "Leaving the Mountains"

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Review of Leaving the Mountains

This piece provides an interesting and essential perspective on the immigration issue right now. Instead of joining the endless parade of stories discussing immigrants coming to the US, the narrator puts his own spin on things by discussing emigration from his community, and he does so very effectively.
The piece is structured so as to draw parallels between immigrants leaving other countries and people leaving Appalachian communities, and apparently many of the same motives lie behind each: little work, poor economy, dangerous jobs. The narrator also does a great job examining the conflicting forces behind the decision to stay or go. But what impressed me most was that even such a small editorial could have an effective story arc: the listener is first introduced to the conflict, the scene is set and discussed, and finally we hear the narrator make a choice...
This story is truly a breath of fresh air, and would be an almost necessary addition to any show about immigration and the surrounding issues.

Comment for "Gay Marriage In Texas: Talking About Proposition 2"

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Review of Gay Marriage In Texas: Talking About Proposition 2

News stories are hard to do well - the fine line between the informational and the personal (a little personality keeps the piece interesting) is very fine indeed, and most stories tend to one side. Not so with "Gay Marriage In Texas". The narrator first looks at public apathy toward the proposition through her own eyes, then resolves to go to a vigil in order to get the full story.
The tape from the vigil is stellar: the
sound is very clean, the amount of background noise used is never distracting, and the interview clips are neither rambling nor overly condensed. The interviewees do a great job explaining why the amendment has important remifications for all Texans (not just gays and lesbians).
The piece ends on a powerfully personal note: the realization that, although the anti-amendment protesters were the overwhelming majority at the vigil, they formed a group that had otherwise been silenced in the media. Kudos to the narrator and producer for helping these minority voices get heard - this is a piece that deserves to be listened to far and wide, and not just in Texas.

Comment for "Austin Life"

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Review of Austin Life

It takes a lot to make me feel warm and fuzzy towards my tiny hometown of Sebastopol, which I usually find so mundane and all-out LAME, but this piece did it skillfully, evoking many of the best feelings I've had toward my little slice of pastoral paradise. The young narrator opens with a scene many of us can identify with (looking at the city's beauty as her plane comes in for a landing) and then explores all the sides of attachment to one's home, such as putting down roots in a new place, family connections, and simply exploring the area, skillfully and simply.
However, she also does a great job of explaining what makes THIS town, Austin, so unique, and even offers a humorous explanation as to why the town might be so quirky, shattering a couple of my preconceived notions about Texas in the process.
Though the narration was a little uneven at times, the piece flowed well overall, and could work well in a wide context - anything based around the general idea of home.

Comment for "Where Were You Fifth Period?"

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Review of Where Were You Fifth Period?

Ah, cutting class. A time-honored high school tradition that unites us all, ditching has been practiced by pretty much every high school student. "Where Were You Fifth Period" takes a look at the reasons why students cut class, from the ordinary ("I woke up late!" and "The class was boring" have been student excuses since the Stone Age") to the exceptional - one girl didn't go to school for three days in order to attend a concert.
The best part of this piece, though, was the way it exposed a little of the school system's hypocrisy through the casual student responses. Two girls admit that they cut class in order to finish a class project, and another says that since the school wouldn't let her father pick her up (he wasn't on the "emergency contact" list) she had to just leave instead. These responses lent a very interesting light to the piece, making it more than just another humorous montage of teens doing funny things.
The piece would work well in a larger magazine-style show about high school; it might be a little short to stand well on its own.

Comment for "Love is Like an Apple"

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Review of Love is Like an Apple

The premise behind "Love is Like an Apple" is a simple one: youth reporter asks peers what love is, then makes a sound collage. The finished piece, however, provides an insightful look into a not-so-simple issue. I feel like many teens toss the word around without any significance, so I was interested to hear the thoughts and views of these particular young people.
The responses in this piece range from the silly ("the word we use to justify our codependence") to the disillusioned ("everything everyone says is going to be really cheesy"), the vague ("it's a step beyond liking something") to the conventional ("caring unconditionally for someone"). But, ultimately, I was pleased to hear how many people had taken the time to really think about what love meant to them, and at the end of this piece I realized that, like always, my worries about the Youth of Today were pretty much baseless.
This piece would fit very well in a larger magazine about high school issues - or, perhaps, it could be saved for Valentine's Day 2007.

Comment for "Teachers Go Wild"

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Review of Teachers Go Wild

A short but amusing and introspective piece, "Teachers Go Wild" looks at what the teachers at one school do for fun after the final bell rings.
The piece starts out by mocking kids' attitudes about their teacher's inabililty to cut loose. ("Fun?" one teacher asks in mock horror. "What is fun?") From there, upbeat music leads into a montage of voices, each describing their leisure activities - some fairly commonplace, like reading and doing the laundry, and some particularly revealing and perhaps a bit creepy (going to Vegas for the adult entertainment, or, as one woman admits, "I spend time with my kids, but I don't really like 'em"). One man does his (not very good) Tom Petty impression. But the most entertaining quotes are from those teachers who share the same interests as their students - going to metal shows and joining the mosh pit, clubbing, and singing are all mentioned. Despite the way they lord over us in the classroom, the message this piece overwhelmingly sends is that, at the end of the day, teachers are really just like us.

Comment for "Abortion"

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Review of Abortion

WOW. Every so often, I come across a piece that just floors me, and this is definitely one of those pieces.
"Abortion" starts out by describing the community in which the story takes place. Listeners may stereotype the small town in which "the church is the community, and the community is the church", but even I, living in my Green-party dominated hippie haven, was surprised to hear that even the town's doctors wouldn't talk.
We then meet the story's protagonist, a young woman named Ruby with an unwanted pregnancy. Ruby starts out hopeful about her pregnancy, saying that she is willing to keep the baby, even if it means leaving her husband behind, but soon begins to have second thoughts, and in the most harrowing part of the story describes an attempted home abortion with a coat hanger.
This piece provides a timely and relevant look at an issue that is increasingly politicized, and its most effective quality is that both the narrator and the protagonist change their minds about abortion over the course of the piece. The very simple style adds greatly to the emotional gravity of the piece: instead of being edited into sound bites, Ruby's story is allowed to tell itself with no interference - the hallmark of an excellent radio piece.

Comment for "Glasnost"

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Review of Glasnost

outLoud radio's "Glasnost" is one girl's story of coming out to her parents - and her parents' response to a very confusing and unfamiliar situation. The story starts out bluntly, as we hear the teen narrator rehearsing what she'll tell her parents: "Mom, Dad...I'm gay." Soon after, we join her in the kitchen, as she tries to get up the nerve to tell her parents, a situation we've all been in (what teen hasn't freaked out about telling their parents something?). Predictably, our narrator's parents are none too happy at first.
The most rewarding and enjoyable part of the story is watching (or hearing) the parents grow and accept their daughter for who she is. The piece ends by coming full circle - somewhere in the middle, the narrator's mom wistfully dreams about seeing her daughter on her wedding day, happily standing next to a groom in a suit. The big "payoff" for me was at the very end of the piece. The narrator brings her new girl friend home to meet Mom and Dad, who are...thrilled to see their daughter so happy.
"Glasnost" is the type of story that can very easily turn into a cliche, but the narrator and producers skillfully avoid being trite or overly sentimental, and even the most intense moments in the story are told with humor and grace. This piece would fit well in a number of formats, but a magazine-type show about teen relationships or GLBTQ issues would be most effective.

Comment for "Southwest Side Stories: Forty in a Classroom"

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Review of Southwest Side Stories: Forty in a Classroom

Although our parents will try to convince us that middle school wasn't really THAT bad, most teens remember it as an intellectually dead holding tank between elementary school and high schoool. "Forty in a classroom" starts out by describing a scene familiar to many - students walking into their middle school for the first time - and then delivers the surprise: the classroom is overcrowded, stinky, and unclean. At this point in the story, anyone under 18 will nod slowly, recognizing the sounds of their own golden years being wasted away in a portable, while adults will be surprised, even disturbed, that students are still expected to be happy and productive in these conditions. The piece goes on to elaborate the suffocating environment: police cars parked outside and unfriendly peers are both commonplace. The story is simple, with no music or effects, but it does an excellent job of narrating the bleak social landscape that is middle school. This piece would fit well in any series about education; the issues it brings up need attention.

Comment for "Selling A Papers"

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Review of Selling A Papers

The thing that caught my eye - not my ear - about this piece was the topic choice. Almost everyone I know has cheated on an essay once or twice, usually by getting it off a web site like the ones mentioned in this piece. Despite this, I've never once heard of a story about these web sites, until now. Kudos to the narrator of this piece for finding a need and filling it.
The other great part about "Selling A Papers" was the balance between a personal story arc (high school student wants to make a buck, high school student considers selling her papers, and high school student finally decides it's not worth it) and the informative, investigative reporting style (I had no idea that so many websites worked on commission, and I had never dreamed that you could sell CD-ROMs of your old essays on eBay).
This piece has an interesting and informative take on a teen phenomenon, and would be a good fit in any show about high school life or academics.

Comment for "Mind Your Metal"

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Review of Mind Your Metal

"Mind Your Metal" provides the casual listener (and metal newbie) with a basic overview of the genre, and some of the surrounding controversies. The piece opens with an interesting look at metal through generations - even the women at the local Dairy Queen are metal fans, and they fondly recount the music of their youth.
For me, this was the most interesting aspect of the piece. Although "Mind Your Metal" would have benefited from a greater historical context, it deos a great job examining how metal isn't just a craze for "kids these days" but rather something each generation has enjoyed, a point that is driven home well through an interview with one narrator's English teacher, also a devout metal fan. In this interview, common misconceptions about metal are discussed and debunked - it is stated that "metal is what you want to make of it", and after listening to the interview, by far the most interesting segment of the piece, I came away with a newfound respect for this much-maligned genre of music.
The only major change I would make relates to the music in the piece - an original metal song is included at the end in its entirety, and while the song is a great addition to the piece, it would probably be more effective sprinkled throughout.

Comment for "Southwest Side Stories: The Game of Go"

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Review of Southwest Side Stories: The Game of Go

"The Game of Go" starts off with some very pleasant white noise in the background - the sound of a train arriving at the station. After that, our narrator takes us the on a short but intriguing journey - from the school in his South Side neighborhood to a North Side cafe where he plays Go every week.
The piece provides a good sense of place, and makes the setting easy for the listener to imagine. Small aspects of the setting and event are told in great detail, and complemented nicely with simple sound effects of Go pieces being placed on the board. The storytelling is excellent too - the narrator speaks poetically, and uses words like "combatants" and "battle" to give the reader a more intimate sense of his own feelings.
Though this story is short and relatively simple, it is elegantly told, and the youth perspective on such an old game is refreshing and well told. This piece is probably too short to stand on its own, but it would fit in well with other stories about games, hobbies, or neighborhoods.

Comment for "Dressy Girls"

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Review of Dressy Girls

I've listened to a lot of youth radio stories over time, but none have outright disturbed me as much as this one. It didn't regale me with stories about gang violence or cautionary tales about eating disorders - rather, through humor, it made me realize something downright CREEPY about myself: I had become one of those irritating and shallow girls who bought pants to impress my boyfriend.
The piece started out on a good note, with overlapping freshmen describing what they were wearing. This effectively created a sense of chaos while emphasizing that all these girls were in essence wearing the same thing. Then, through probing and incisive interviewing, the piece's author made listeners question why they bought and wore what they did. I found myself looking down at my American Eagle shirt and Gap pants more than once, and realizing I didn't really have a good answer to that question. Throughout, the narration juxtaposed quotes from Seventeen magazine with these fashion-obsessed ninth graders for a very effective dose of humor.
This piece is, on the surface, very light-hearted, but the issues it exposes are not. I have read many a feminist "expose" on why women dress the way they do, and none were as revealing as this piece. I'd listen to it again, but I'm off to the local thrift store now to pick up some tye-dye.

Comment for "My Confirmation"

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Review of My Confirmation

This piece draws listeners in immediately with words familiar to many - the Lord's Prayer. But lest we think that this is an all-encompassing religion story, the narrator hones in on a very specific part of Catholic Christianity - being confirmed. Not being Catholic, I didn't really understand the significance behind confirmation, but this informative little piece explained as well as entertained.
Despite her young age, the narrator grapples with fairly intense theological questions, such as being confirmed because you want to versus being confirmed because it's expected, and "part of tradition". The informal narration was good, and gave the piece a very raw and personal feel. This piece would be ideally broadcast as part of a series on religion - it's very interesting and refreshing to hear youth voices deal with big issues like religion.

Comment for "Aspiring Teen Musicians"

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Review of Aspiring Teen Musicians

As an "aspiring teen musician" and future rock star, the idea of this piece appealed to me, and I was interested in what these motivated young people had to say about themselves and their dreams (and their humble beginnings - one quote about "how bad we sucked when we were younger" made me laugh out loud). Sound clips of living-room rehearsals made the piece come alive, and I could envision myself practicing with my own bandmates or sitting on the sofa as the girls in the piece rehearsed. Also, the author's own involvement in the subject added a degree of ethos that is important for a piece like this.
The only suggestions I'd make would be to improve the sound quality (there was some microphone noise at times) and to perhaps include a greater variety of aspiring musicians in the piece - including young jazz artists or aspiring MCs would have given this piece a much greater impact. Ultimately, though, "Aspiring Teen Musicians" is well done, and its message - skill alone isn't enough, hard work is needed too - is very much appreciated by this listener.

Comment for "Teen Marriage"

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Review of Teen Marriage

WOW, what a great piece. In just a few seconds, "Teen Marriage" takes a young listeners from a familiar scenario (senior prom) to the very foreign situation of getting married right after high school. This is truly an eye-opening piece, and I was instantly drawn in to a facet of teen life I'd never before heard about.
But what really blew me out of the water was the story's structure. Far from the negative stereotypes the listener might have about teenaged wives, the young brides interviewed had the same goals and visions for the future as many (much older) couples I know, and they presented these views with maturity and poise. The other side of the argument was also well-represented: students who disapproved of teen marriage voiced their own views clearly and pragmatically.
The style of "Teen Marriage" was also great. The narration was kept to a perfect minimum, allowing the unorthodox subject matter to shine through without being overwhelmed. The two sides of the debate were given equal airtime, and no sound effects or music got in the way of the content. "Teen Marriage"'s professional tone would make it an ideal candidate for any news magazine-style show.
This is one of the best youth radio pieces I've heard. Ever.

Comment for "Let's Talk About Sex"

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Review of The Talk

Blunt Youth Radio's "The Talk" starts out on a high note, with appropriate, fun music and an amusing quote about "self-abuse", and holds its awkwardly hilarious tone for the duration of the piece. The pacing is wonderful - during a montage of student recollections, each quote lasts just the right amount of time, and the viewpoints are mixed up nicely. The icing on the cake, however, was the narrator's conversation with her parents, which reminded me all too well of my own embarrassing conversations with my flustered mother. The only change I'd make is to spice up the narration a little - a topic this dynamic and fun deserves an equally fun and dynamic tone. The piece would work well in any context - as part of a series, or just a fun little interstitial on its own.