Michael has humorous essay that stays on point from start to quick finish.
I think it is written well but read it to me one more time with meaning! Give me a bit more theater in that voice and use pregnant pauses and other devises to sell the lines that are clever and/or cute & funny.
My wife hit a fence post...she must really be happy. Get some good news...slice a finger tip. Those lines teased the tickle bone. Deliver them with a bit more theater and you'll have me guffawing.
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Bill Anderson
Posted on January 05, 2007 at 09:24 AM | Permalink
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Michael has humorous essay that stays on point from start to quick finish.
I think it is written well but read it to me one more time with meaning! Give me a bit more theater in that voice and use pregnant pauses and other devises to sell the lines that are clever and/or cute & funny.
My wife hit a fence post...she must really be happy. Get some good news...slice a finger tip. Those lines teased the tickle bone. Deliver them with a bit more theater and you'll have me guffawing.
Regardless, nice work.