Well-done and entertaining. Good use of location sound effects to make the story sound more "real". This story took guts to make. We recommend this story to any broadcaster looking for a youthful urban perspective.
Students Julio and David let us peak or listen to what happens behind the curtain when radio is being made. They tape a conversation between themselves as they wait to interview Oakland Mayor Jerry Brown. They are totally open with the listeners that they have never heard of Jerry Brown, his political offices OR the fact that he is running for Attorney General of California.
They weren't even sure what an AG does. So the young men ask Brown pointed questions they feel many people want to know the answers to - about gangs, illegal immigrants (one boy admits he's an illegal) and the importance of the law.
They keep the tape rolling when they go get something to eat afterwards- interviewing customers about the shape the world is in. AND they wrap it all up with lessons learned. Keep rolling tape guys, you do good work!
The content of your story was not bad, but if you cut some parts it would make the story shorter and easier to listen to (maybe use less descriptive words, or in some cases be less detailed?). Most typical radio stories run from three and a half to five minutes long, about the attention span of radio listeners!
Listening, I believe the meat of the story boils down to when you were talking to Jerry Brown one on one. You asked him very good questions. It was cool that you could talk to one of your elected officials and get some straight answers out of ‘em! I liked your reflections at the end in the restaurant. It was a good wrap up for your day and your story.
The reads in the story could be more enthusiastic and natural. I know it’s hard, I just completed my own story trying to get cuts right. My tip for better story telling would be to envision telling your story to one person, say your friend. Sometimes the thought of millions of people hearing your story can be intimidating. Truthfully, the radio or the computer playing your story will usually only have one person listening.
One more thing. What might also help (this is what I do) is to queue up your cuts, and then start your voicing coming out of them. You’ll get the right tone for whatever clip you are coming out of and you’ll get the energy of the clip (say if it’s exciting or even emotional).
By the way, I really like the musical selection all the way through. Nice work guyz!
Comments for The Night We Met Jerry Brown
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Kids of CAT
Posted on November 09, 2005 at 07:08 AM | Permalink
Review of The Boyz Meet Jerry Brown
Well-done and entertaining. Good use of location sound effects to make the story sound more "real". This story took guts to make. We recommend this story to any broadcaster looking for a youthful urban perspective.
Tripp Sommer
Posted on July 04, 2005 at 02:33 PM | Permalink
Review of The Boyz Meet Jerry Brown
Students Julio and David let us peak or listen to what happens behind the curtain when radio is being made. They tape a conversation between themselves as they wait to interview Oakland Mayor Jerry Brown. They are totally open with the listeners that they have never heard of Jerry Brown, his political offices OR the fact that he is running for Attorney General of California.
They weren't even sure what an AG does. So the young men ask Brown pointed questions they feel many people want to know the answers to - about gangs, illegal immigrants (one boy admits he's an illegal) and the importance of the law.
They keep the tape rolling when they go get something to eat afterwards- interviewing customers about the shape the world is in. AND they wrap it all up with lessons learned. Keep rolling tape guys, you do good work!
Andre Rosario
Posted on June 30, 2005 at 07:53 PM | Permalink
Review of The Boyz Meet Jerry Brown
The content of your story was not bad, but if you cut some parts it would make the story shorter and easier to listen to (maybe use less descriptive words, or in some cases be less detailed?). Most typical radio stories run from three and a half to five minutes long, about the attention span of radio listeners!
Listening, I believe the meat of the story boils down to when you were talking to Jerry Brown one on one. You asked him very good questions. It was cool that you could talk to one of your elected officials and get some straight answers out of ‘em! I liked your reflections at the end in the restaurant. It was a good wrap up for your day and your story.
The reads in the story could be more enthusiastic and natural. I know it’s hard, I just completed my own story trying to get cuts right. My tip for better story telling would be to envision telling your story to one person, say your friend. Sometimes the thought of millions of people hearing your story can be intimidating. Truthfully, the radio or the computer playing your story will usually only have one person listening.
One more thing. What might also help (this is what I do) is to queue up your cuts, and then start your voicing coming out of them. You’ll get the right tone for whatever clip you are coming out of and you’ll get the energy of the clip (say if it’s exciting or even emotional).
By the way, I really like the musical selection all the way through. Nice work guyz!