This sounds like an interesting experiment that's not quite ready for air. I love the idea of having a commentary that sounds like a monologue. But the producer is being much too kind in assessing the quality of the delivery. At times they hit it right on the mark and it sounds like you're hearing an edited piece made from an interview. But most of the time it sounds like someone reading out-loud off a sheet of paper. In terms of content, I would have liked to have heard more about the feelings and emotions of this woman. This could almost have been done in the third person.