Great opening! I was expecting a longer scene to open the piece (that formula start with action...) I liked hearing the kid explaining the process of the circus.

The editing between his parents was a little too much rapid-fire back and forth for me - needs more variation, and don't be afraid to pause for nuance. Also, I thought it was weird that it was panned left and right. Just putting that out there.

The ending section is stressful but powerful, it must have been hard to tape - was it a lapel mic? Maybe try keeping the marching band music as a bed - maybe to create tension.

Sometimes I thought you could have done fade-outs slower, or kept ambient noise underneath talking more often.

Great story, good development, nice bookends! yay!