Although this piece is a first person essay about a personal topic, I found it to be rather flat. The voicing sounds overly scripted and the piece could use a good edit to tighten it up. If it's to get any carriage in the future, it should be edited down to 3:00 to 3:30 to fit into optional cutaway slots. It would work for a future St. Patrick's Day.

I like the topic and some of the visual imagery in the writing. However, in order to draw in the listeners, Jeffrey needs to put the script down and work on more conversational voicing. The cadence and reading, except for the last 30 seconds, feels too tight. This is especially noticeable when Jeffrey discusses the connection with the police officer and the tear that comes to his eye.

Also, there seems to be an editing error at 2:23 into the piece.

Listeners hear a lot of commentaries on the national magazines, so the bar for writing and voicing is high.