Yow, having just listened to the recently submitted youth piece about "The Cost of War", I was definitley hearing this one with a different perspective.
Well, I thought your piece was pretty good. The music was pretty nice, it faded well... good talking voice too... it's just that, the way it is now, it sort of feels like it is missing something. I feel a little curious, maybe as to what your reasons were for enlisting... you could have included some personal opinions about some related political stuff, even. And I think your piece could have used some more details interspersed, to make it more... "vivid". Well, good job.
Review of Dear Mom: I Joined the Marines
Ben Lavine
Posted on July 26, 2005 at 03:04 PM
Yow, having just listened to the recently submitted youth piece about "The Cost of War", I was definitley hearing this one with a different perspective.
Well, I thought your piece was pretty good. The music was pretty nice, it faded well... good talking voice too... it's just that, the way it is now, it sort of feels like it is missing something. I feel a little curious, maybe as to what your reasons were for enlisting... you could have included some personal opinions about some related political stuff, even. And I think your piece could have used some more details interspersed, to make it more... "vivid". Well, good job.