I enjoyed listening to this story and I connected with Roberto, though I've never shared any of his experiences. I was able to recreate them because he gave visuals (like his first experience with snow). I liked the way the sound bytes were set up to show Roberto's journey from the Bahamas to his experiences in the US. It made the story easy to follow. Only one thing to comment about. I would've liked a little more direction towards the end of the story. Your piece ends kind of abruptly and leaves me hanging! A transition into the end would have been nice, for example, stating the conclusion Roberto had come to: America’s streets really aren’t paved with gold. The narration could be a bit more enthusiastic but overall, superb story.
Review of Roberto: We Don't Live in Huts
Andre Rosario
Posted on June 09, 2005 at 07:25 AM
I enjoyed listening to this story and I connected with Roberto, though I've never shared any of his experiences. I was able to recreate them because he gave visuals (like his first experience with snow). I liked the way the sound bytes were set up to show Roberto's journey from the Bahamas to his experiences in the US. It made the story easy to follow. Only one thing to comment about. I would've liked a little more direction towards the end of the story. Your piece ends kind of abruptly and leaves me hanging! A transition into the end would have been nice, for example, stating the conclusion Roberto had come to: America’s streets really aren’t paved with gold. The narration could be a bit more enthusiastic but overall, superb story.